
Comforter
deep seated chill, old bones complaints echoed in the thunder of rain
eyes stare unseeing, time melts in the brilliance of her smile
winter’s mist dissolves, forgotten in the embrace of remembrance
- 3 lines in length, averaging 14-16 syllables per line (for a poem total of 44-46 syllables).
- Line 1 introduces the situation or theme of the poem.
- Line 2 develops the theme with more detail or a “turn” in argument.
- Line 3 presents a “twist” and conclusion.
- Sijo are meant to be songs, so this form is more lyrical.
- Poems can be profound, humorous, metaphysical, and personal.
- Each line should have a pause (or break) somewhere in the middle.
- First half of the final line employs a “twist” of meaning, sound, or another poetic device.

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A beautiful poem Deb. 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
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Thanks Sadje, just 30 to go
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You’re welcome! Easy peasy!
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Bravo, Deb. Looking good. Keep going.
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I have a feeling I might bend the rules slightly on occasion 😊
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This is a lovely sijo, Deb! You inspired me to at least look up July’s Camp NaNoWriMo…I haven’t made a decision yet, as I’ve no clue what I’d write about at the moment.
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Thanks, you could always try a journal, that was my first thought but then I thought poetry might be fun 😄
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Poetry would be right up my alley, so to speak–and I’ve got a new blog going which is somewhat like a journal…so maybe I’ll be at Camp, no promises😊
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ooh how exciting, I might have to try a few of these!
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You’re more than welcome
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Very nice, Deb!
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Thanks Eugi, much appreciated
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Most welcome, Deb!
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Love the visual and emotional contexts ❤️❤️
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Thanks Michele, I thought the photos would distract is the poem was terrible 😂
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To borrow Pete’s phrase stop the flannel! It’s not at all. The beauty of poetry is how multi dimensional it is ❤️
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This reminds me so much of my Dad.
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😊
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